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Offline Gage Parker

Gage Parker - Waiting [R-1]
« on: 19 Feb 2012, 02:56 pm »
First and Last Name: Gage Parker
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Bloodline: Pure
Hair Color: Brown
Eye Color: Brown
General Build: Average
Height: Average

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Birthplace: London
Brief Childhood History: Nathan is an only child who was born and raised in the North West London suburb of Gerrards Cross.  While not being necessarily rich, Nathan could be described as having a typical middle class upbringing.  He often spent time with just his mother as his father was often away from the home on business.  Nathan was always a little unclear as to why, as his parents only gave him a limited explanation of what his father does.  In actual fact, Nathan's father was an Auror, but his parents didn't want him to know the full truth as they felt certain if they told him, he might be more inquisitive towards dark wizards and magic.   

Being a person of magical decent, Nathan found it difficult to fit in with the other kids in his early education muggle schools he attended. His parents assured him that he would fit in more at Hogwarts, the school that they both attended and where they met.  Nathan always heard stories from his parents about their time as being Ravenclaw students, causing Nathan to get more and more excited about going.  Unusally bright like his parents, his intellect causes him to be socially awkward in some situations.  His ambitions in the wizarding world is to work in the Ministry of Magic, where his father works.


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Strengths: Nathan is unusally bright like his parents, something that his parents are proud of.  He is also quite dedicated in what he does, finding it very difficult to give up on tasks once he starts  them.  His class of (will be) expertise is Charms.
Weaknesses:  Being so smart, Nathan typically finds social situations sometimes awkward, but once people get to know him, he can be found to be a nice person.  Another weakness is that he is almost too trusting, a cause of him being an only child and having few friends in school.  His class of weakness will be Divination. 

What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Ravencalw, as, he is very bright for his age and, both his parents were in the house as well.  Nathan is also quick witted and good at solving problems and issues.  He is also relatively well off, as a cause of his middle class upbringing.  People would also caracterize him as being handsome for his age. 
« Last Edit: 09 Mar 2012, 03:47 pm by Jayce »

Offline Jayce

Re: Gage Parker
« Reply #1 on: 19 Feb 2012, 04:02 pm »
Hi there! Welcome to HPRPG!

Alright, just a few things to get to here. While it's great that Nathan is a nice guy, the way you currently have this worded in the weakness section, makes it come across as if you're godmodding. You can't control how other characters perceive and react to Nathan. So instead of saying 'they realize he's a nice guy', it's better to state it more openly as 'he can be found to be a nice guy'.

Once you've fixed that, just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'!

And on an added note, you seem to be placing two spaces after every period in your paragraphs. While it's not technically anything wrong, I just wanted to make the observation that it seems to be rather visually jarring. Mainly because the particular font we use on the board actually has quite the wide spacing to begin with.

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski

Offline Jayce

Re: Gage Parker - Edited
« Reply #2 on: 09 Mar 2012, 03:47 pm »
Ravenclaw house is currently closed at the moment. You will be placed on the waiting list, but if at any point you decide you would like your character to be in another house, just edit the sheet accordingly and reply here.

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski

Offline Gage Parker

Re: Gage Parker - Waiting [R-1]
« Reply #3 on: 14 Mar 2012, 07:26 am »
I think i'll just wait, do you know how long it could take before I'm sorted?

Offline Jayce

Re: Gage Parker - Waiting [R-1]
« Reply #4 on: 15 Mar 2012, 01:43 pm »
I can't say exactly how much longer it'll be unfortunately. Two more Hufflepuffs need to be sorted before we can sort any Ravenclaws through, and that might take just another day or another week. :/

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski